I no longer sizzle across the city at night
I no longer sizzle across the city at night
a burning arrow whooshing for the target
I can see the dry and strident light blaze
from the window of your spiritless house
Sometimes I long to come in from chaos
that surrounds me here in natural light
But I gather my spirits and hold them close
and count my verdant rain-wet riches
I move forward slower towards the goal
My aim approaching the truth.
I no longer sizzle across the city at night
a burning arrow whooshing for the target
I can see the dry and strident light blaze
from the window of your spiritless house
Sometimes I long to come in from chaos
that surrounds me here in natural light
But I gather my spirits and hold them close
and count my verdant rain-wet riches
I move forward slower towards the goal
My aim approaching the truth.
I no longer sizzle across the city at night
ReplyDeletea burning arrow whooshing for the target
I move forward slower towards the goal
My aim approaching the truth.
good lines in the poem
Consider using a wet fire-or smoldering metaphor -or like coal a hot yet more contained fire in the line "I move forward slower towards the goal" for better cohesiveness